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My Favorite Errors to Correct (Don't make these mistakes, and your writing will rise above most other writing.) Part 1

By Lisa J. Lehr

Following is a compilation of the kinds of mistakes I see most often in writing, often by successfully published writers. This article is adapted from a handout I give my lifewriting students.

I base my assertions of what is "right (or at least "best") upon the opinions of the authors of writing books such as The Elements of Style. This and my other favorite writing books are listed in the bibliography (at the end of this article).

This list is by no means exhaustive. (Many, many books have been written on the subject.) It simply reflects the tools that I think are most easily used to make your writing as good as it can be, with the least effort. Each mistake I have listed is followed by an example and the best way (or ways) to fix it.

I ask my lifewriting students to look at this list periodically while writing their stories. Which suggestions you choose to follow or ignore is entirely your decision!

Non-negotiables: These are established rules that, according to the latest books, still apply.

Dangling participles are never acceptable. A participle is a verb form ending with "-ing, and a dangling one happens when the subject and verb don't go together. Example: "Driving to class today, a deer ran across all four lanes of highway! This won't work because we all know deer don't drive (or attend classes, for that matter). Say, "As I was driving to class today, a deer"."

Likewise, dangling modifiers are never acceptable. Although it takes many forms, the mistake I see frequently goes something like this: "As a writer, it is important to use good grammar." This doesn't work because "writer and "it are not equivalent. Say, "For a writer, it is important to use good grammar, or "As a writer, I believe it is important to use good grammar."

Nominative vs. objective pronouns: Generally, nominative pronouns begin sentences (I, we, he, she, they), and objective pronouns end them (me, us, him, her, them). For example, "She gave it to me, and I gave it back to her." Most of us learn not to say things like "Me and him are best friends by the time we finish school. Adults, however, tend to make the opposite mistake and say things like "Just between you and I"."; "It was a good experience for my kids and I"; "I can see a resemblance between he and his brother." Substitute me, me, and him.

"Who vs. "whom can be tricky in a complex sentence, and writers make mistakes both ways. The easiest way to do it right is to remember who is nominative and whom is objective. Try substituting he or him and see which sounds better. Example: "It was the teacher who everyone agreed made the mistake is correct. Simplify and substitute: "He made the mistake." You wouldn't say, "Him made the mistake, would you?

Another way to remember this is that "everyone agreed is parenthetical, meaning that the sentence makes perfect sense without it.

"e.g." vs. "i.e.": Although it is possible that in some sentences, either one would work, I frequently see "i.e." where "e.g." should be. "e.g." means "for example"; "i.e." means "that is." In this sentence: "You must turn in your assignment tomorrow unless you have a really good excuse, e.g., your dog ate it, if I substituted i.e., I'd be suggesting that your dog eating it is the only good excuse for not turning in your assignment.

Hyphenating is over-used. Pickup truck is correct, although you might say pick-up location, or pick-up instructions. On the other hand, you would say, "I'm going to leave now to pick up my kids from school." In general, when word combinations work together to create an adjective, it is hyphenated, although in some common words, such as pickup truck, it has become one word. Say either "My daughter was a five-year-old [hyphenated] at the time, or "My daughter was five years old [not hyphenated] at the time." Say, "This is my everyday [one word] hat; I wear it every day [two words] but Sunday."

Comma use: "I love horses, dogs, and cats is correct (with a comma before and). On the other hand, you could say, "The menu included steak, lobster, baked potato, vegetables, salad, bread and butter (without the comma before and) because bread and butter are more closely related than the other items. The comma before "and is referred to as the Oxford comma, and is usually used in literary writing, although usually not in journalism.

More on comma use: Both "My brother Joe is a firefighter and "My brother, Joe, is a firefighter are correct, although the second one somewhat more suggests that Joe is my only brother. Neither "My brother, Joe is a firefighter nor "My brother Joe, is a firefighter is acceptable.

The hardest comma rule for me to accept: The comma goes inside of the quotation marks, even "though logically it often seems not to belong there, in the words of Strunk & White. You might call it "strange, even "bizarre, but it's true.

"Due to the fact that": Never say this! The single word "because works wonderfully all by itself. Besides, due to works only between two nouns, as in, "The cancellation [noun] was due to the rain [noun]."

"That vs. "which": In my experience, it is overwhelmingly more common for people to say which when they mean that than vice-versa. Although each is distinct in purpose, depending on the meaning you want to convey, sometimes either one will work. "Please go get my shoes that are by the door distinguishes that pair of shoes from all of my other shoes. "Please go get my shoes, which are by the door implies that I have only one pair of shoes (not likely), and I am giving you the additional information that they are by the door. Or it could mean that we have already established which shoes I am talking about. The key is that which needs to be preceded by a comma.

Plurals and possessives of names ending in "s": The following are all correct. "My grandfather, father, and brother are all named Charles, so I have three Charleses in my family. My brother Charles's house is next door to mine, and my dad's is down the street, so two of the Charleses addresses are almost the same."

"Mr. and Mrs. Jones lived across the street. The Joneses had no children. But Mr. Jones's business was successful, so the Joneses house was huge." You get the picture.

This applies even to words and names ended in double "s, as in "the princess's dress."

The exception to this rule is with ancient names. For example, "Jesus name and "Moses law, without the additional "s, are correct.

Parallel construction: This is one of the hardest rules to explain, but, in my opinion, it's one of the most annoying things when you've learned to recognize it and see it done wrong. In essence, it means that the parts of a sentence must follow the same pattern. I take my examples from Strunk and White's The Elements of Style, pp. 26-28.

Bad: Formerly, science was taught by the textbook method, while now the laboratory method is employed.

Good: Formerly, science was taught by the textbook method; now it is taught by the laboratory method.

Bad: the French, the Italians, Spanish, and Portuguese

Good: the French, the Italians, the Spanish, and the Portuguese

Bad: in spring, summer, or in winter

Good: in spring, summer, or winter

Also good: in spring, in summer, or in winter

Bad: His speech was marked by disagreement and scorn for his opponent's position.

Good: His speech was marked by disagreement with and scorn for his opponent's position.

Bad: a time not for words but action

Good: a time not for words but for action

Bad: Either you must grant his request or incur his ill will.

Good: You must either grant his request or incur his ill will.

(This would also work: Either you must grant his request or you will incur his ill will.)

Last but not least, perhaps my biggest pet peeve: "Lie vs. "lay." Lie is the word to use when any person, animal, or inanimate object acts upon him-, her-, or itself; lay is the word for when any person, animal, or inanimate object acts upon any other. The following sentences are all correct. "I'm tired; I'm going to go lie down for a while." "Dogs and cats love to lie in the sun." "He always lies down when he reads, so then he falls asleep." "A tree fell down during the night, and it is now lying across the driveway."

"The baby fell asleep; I'm going to go lay him down in his crib." "I'm going to take off my jacket and lay it across the chair." "My dog is on the lawn, carefully laying all his chew toys in a row." "My hen lays an egg every day." In any of these, if you confuse "lay with "lie (or vice-versa), it will be wrong.

Notice, also, that the past tense of "lie is "lay, so these are also correct: "I was tired, so I lay down for a while." "My pets lay in the sun all day." "The tree lay in the driveway until we figured out how to move it."

Please continue to part 2"

About The Author

Lisa J. Lehr is a freelance writer and editor with a specialty in business and marketing communications. She holds a biology degree and has worked in a variety of fields, including the pharmaceutical industry and teaching, and has a related interest in personal history. She is also a graduate of American Writers and Artists Institute (AWAI), America's leading course on copywriting.

This article ©Lisa J. Lehr 2005.


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